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Chapter 4

A Chance of a Lifetime

鈥淎aron, where is everybody?鈥? I asked as I saw Aaron sitting alone in front of the whaleback ship.鈥淵ou know how it is Kyra鈥攖hey had their own things to do. Last night they came because they were curious who I was, um interested in. That鈥檚 all.鈥? Alone at last! Alone鈥攚ith a dragon! Mister caramel lightly dipped in dark chocolate eyes! The eyes that I felt I could meld into鈥︹€淜yra. Kyra!鈥濃€? Huh?鈥?鈥? Am I so boring that you have to day dream when you鈥檙e with me?鈥?he smirked, gently caressing my cheek.鈥淣o! No! I was just thinking.鈥? Whew, if he only knew the affect his eyes had on me. 鈥淪o Aaron, what are we going to do tonight? Jump in the lake, cascade over mountains, or talk.鈥?I was so busy staring into his eyes that I he had already changed into his dragon form and was flipping me onto his back.鈥?Aiii鈥︹€? I screamed, surprised.鈥淟et鈥檚 talk鈥?I heard him say in my head as we flew low over the water.鈥淏oat! Boat!鈥?was all I could scream as a boat quickly appeared in our path. I closed my eyes not wanting to see the impact. Instead, I felt the slight shift in Aaron鈥檚 body as he coasted out of its path.鈥淵ou can open your eyes now.鈥?he gurgled and snorted. Was he laughing!鈥淵a go ahead and laugh at me鈥?I fumed, 鈥淵ou wouldn鈥檛 think it so funny if we would have crashed.鈥? His gurgling and snorting continued, he was laughing so hard his body was shaking, tickling me as I hung on.鈥淪top.. hahaha鈥?that!鈥?br> We landed at top of the Aerial Lift Bridge.